My views on a short story----PFH66, 60 days left !
Today's story is about a conversation between a man and a small child. A man whose name is John bought a new and smaller house than the one he used to live in after his mother's death. During the moving, an old and heavy clock but all furniture was moved by himself. Why didn't he ask workers to move the clock for him? The reason why he carried the clock in his arms was that the clock had been passed through all his family's generation. During his way to the new house, he stopped and took a break. Suddenly, a small boy stopped in front of him, and then the boy said John was a stupid man because he thought John could buy a watch like everyone else.
I think the boy's words are very interesting and natural. When people are young, they just say what comes into their mind without thinking twice. Although speaking directly to others sometimes might be helpful, in my point of view, speaking after considering is always the best policy.
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hi tom; thank you for Email. here are my hints on this writing. I hope you find it useful :)
line5) "During the moving, all furniture but an old and heavy clock was moved by himself" this sentence means that "he moved all the furniture except the clock!" which I am sure is not your purpose.
line18) come ---> comes
line20) "in my view" --> "in my opinion" or "from my point of view"
and please tell me what level of English you are in. it will help me giving better tips.
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